NOVEL WEB Chapter 23: Gold Lovers: It's Mine
POV Amori
I had been watching their fight for a while—it was quite entertaining. But now, it's time to test this out."Reverse Zone."
Watching them struggle against it was incredibly satisfying. It seemed to be working perfectly, but how long would it take them to adapt? After all, they're Nen users. Too bad I don't have the luxury of waiting hours to find out.
I calmly approached one of the guards and struck his arm with my sword. He tried to parry as best as he could but was surprised to feel no pain. When he tried to assess the damage, he noticed his right hand moving in a gesture that should've been done with the left. I then slashed down from top to bottom—The intended effect was magnificent.
The guard tried to move, but he could barely walk. He crawled on the ground like a worm.
Under the terrified gaze of the others, I coated my fist with Nen and crushed the guard's head.+277 Nen gained.
I glanced at my Nen bar, a specialization Hatsu I had obtained:19,120/450,000K
That's probably the max for a human—or maybe just for me. Surpassing that will definitely be a pain. I need to hit at least 100,000K soon to surpass most Hunters. From there, I can refine my abilities and make more restrictive vows by sacrificing Nen. But that's a problem for later.
The fear on the remaining guards' faces was obvious.The only issue with my Nen bar? Everyone can see it. If it's not active, I gain nothing—and every activation consumes over 4,000 Nen.
Max didn't wait to see what would happen to the guards. He'd been trying to escape for a while, even leaving his treasure behind. Too bad I still had to kill him. After all, he was going the right way—trying to flee the zone, just like Kevin, who was quickly approaching the edge of my reversed zone.
In the blink of an eye, I formed a Nen blade and decapitated the remaining guards.+810 Nen gained.
I sliced off Max's left leg and did the same to Kevin—cutting his right leg with my sword. Kevin used his Nen to dig a hole, trying to escape my territory.
Amori: Looks like they're slowly getting used to the reversal, though they're still making mistakes with their inverted footing. Test complete.
"Earthen Spikes."
Spikes erupted from the ground, striking everything inside the tunnel. Unfortunately, the spikes emerged from the ceiling, missing their mark—he forgot that the closer they are to me, the more disoriented their senses become.Oh, right. I didn't mention that to him.
Kevin: "We can make a deal, right? I'll give you 60% of the treasure if you let us live."
Max remained silent. Seeing the man supposed to protect him offer their treasure for freedom didn't exactly please him.
Amori: "Why settle for 60% when I can take it all? Give me one good reason not to kill you both."
Kevin: "I think—"
Amori: "Blah, blah, blah... I don't want to hear it. You made your choice, and I made mine. Goodnight—that's your misfortune."
I rushed toward them, and Kevin had no idea which direction I was coming from.
Kevin: "Collapse!"—he tried to seal the hole while reinforcing his Ken for protection.
Too slow. His head was already flying through the air.+1200 Nen gained. "Jackpot."
Max, seeing the scene, shielded himself with Ken while attempting to move. Each step destabilized his Nen—it was clear he couldn't maintain it. His attire wasn't made for battle. His leg was severed.
Max: "Aaaaaah!" He screamed in agony, clutching his only functional leg as the other bled profusely.
Max: "Wait! I'll give you everything—just let me live!"
The snot on his face and the smell of urine almost made me consider sparing him.Almost.
Amori: "Sorry, little digger. Orders are orders."—I drove my blade through his throat.+330 Nen gained.
Amori: "Now, how am I going to carry all this?"
I searched Max's body—Bingo. A plastic-covered card was hidden under his stomach."Good thing I didn't pierce his stomach. What an idiot."
Kevin had some keys and gold packs sewn into a weighted vest. Original.
Amori: "Time to move out. The card's probably more valuable than the gold, but I'm not leaving my antiques behind. I need to call in some help to transport all this—oh, look, more visitors."
Over ten Nen users arrived, their eyes locked on my treasure, then on me. Their smug smiles said they thought they had found easy prey.How the hell have they survived this long?
I didn't waste time. Within 20 minutes, they were all on the ground, gasping for air. I had to kill three of them to really drive the message home.
Amori: "Get up, trash. I'm letting you live—be grateful. Carry my gold until I say otherwise. We're heading to the city of AUDERA."
Thief X (thinking): "That's five cities away—he wants to kill us!"
But no one dared speak. Only forced smiles remained, happy to serve.
Amori's mind wandered as his new servants began transporting the treasure. Sitting atop the chests, he stared at the card in his hand.
Amori: "Holy shit—I'm rich."
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Hello, I don't really know what to say. First of all, tell me what's wrong with the book, paragraph by paragraph, please.
I started this book with the idea of a Hatsu based on Shinji's power from Bleach mixed with Law from One Piece. Now I'm not so sure I still want to continue in that direction because it prevents me from writing freely—I always have to check how the Hatsu works for every action, and it feels weird to me.
This whole chapter has existed for a while now. I just cleaned it up a bit and had GPT translate and format it. Sorry for any mistakes you might still find.